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Thursday, 4 June 2015

My Super ultra cool facts about Stars!!!



My Information Report Success Criteria:
Self
Peer
My heading/title:


  • is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)
yes

My opening paragraph/introduction:


  • says what my report is about in a clear way
yes

  • gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification
yes

  • outlines the main features of the subject
yes

My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:


  • have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)
yes

  • are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject


  • give detailed information (factual descriptions)


  • include specific, technical vocabulary


  • are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)


  • may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information


My end paragraph/conclusion:


  • draws the report together/sums up my main points


  • may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found









                                   Super ultra cool facts about Stars!!!
Begin Writing Here:


[Heading/Title of Information Report]
[Introduction]
Have you ever wonder about stars then this is the writing
you need to see. Stars are little lights that shine in the sky they are helpful for a picnic
or a date with someone you love.There are heaps of stars and they all are different
to all the ones we see in nz AA and SA.
[Paragraph 1 - change this to your second subheading]
Types of stars
There are lots and lots types of stars like a dwarf and a dwarf is the most common star
that heaps and heaps of people know like the sun.The sun is a dwarf star and planets orbit
around the sun but that's not the only thing that surprises me what surprises me is that
the sun which is a star is the closest one to earth and that it's the most hottest star and it
is 92.96 degrees.


[Paragraph 2 - change this to your second subheading]
stars and galaxy
Galaxy contains heaps of stars because if there was no stars then there would be know
galaxy in space and  galaxies hold all the future of what's going to happen in 500 years
because how knows is it the stars that make galaxy that holds the future or is it the
galaxy itself that holds the future?.I hope this writing inspired you to write your own.
[Conclusion]
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  1. Anonymous5 June 2015 at 00:37

    Kia ora Orlando,

    I can see that you have included some interesting learning in your writing, but you have only written two paragraphs?? Where is your third paragraph?

    Your next learning steps are:
    1) Writing more factual information. An information report must give others information about a certain topic and this is why it needs to be factual and not opinion-based.
    2) You need to proofread your work and correct any errors to further improve your work and make sure that your paragraphs make sense. I suggest you read your writing aloud and see which parts don't really make sense.

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