In Week 6 of Term 1 our class focussed on how to write great explanations. We wrote about how to survive your first night in Minecraft (the game a lot of us are obsessed with!).
Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.
Signs of Success!
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Peer
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Introduction - briefly tells the reader what the explanation is about
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Present tense
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Formal Language; Technical Language
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Time connectives
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Sequenced and paragraphed (paragraphs have 1 main idea!)
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Ambitious vocabulary (adjectives; verbs)
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Summary - may have an interesting fact or comment about playing the game
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I am going to tell you how to survive the first night in minecraft
First you cut down the wood to make a torch and so you can see. Because if you can’t see
then the dark unsatiated fearless zombie will come. and not only that you also need it to make fire a torch and a plank. When you're at that stage when you have to build a house at least two blocks high and you don’t need a roof
on your first night.
After that build a cave or a an underground tunnel in the morning before the sun goes down don’t wreck it
because the hideous camouflage bush creeper comes out at night so make a cave with a torch and a
tunnel with light like heaven but you better watch out because there are venomous spider that spawn in the dark.And that's how you survive
the first night in minecraft.`
